Wrote it for a friend of mine a few months ago. It didn't come out the way I expected and I'm not sure if I like it. Anyway, I'd really appreciate some feedback and constructive criticism  |
| Wrote it for a friend of mine a few months ago. It didn't come out the way I expected and I'm not sure if I like it. Anyway, I'd really appreciate some feedback and constructive criticism |
HurtCan you ever believe that I could look you in the eye, when you've hurt her so bad and made her cry so many times.Hurt
Did you expect open arms? Or a welcoming smile? When I know you've tortured her, despite her denials.
She's regained her laugh, and the spring in her step. And now you've come back just to hurt her again.
The EndLives far apart and lives still together, I'll wait for you here until the end of forever.The End
It started with a smile, and ended with a tear, but no matter what happens I'll wait for you here.
Now that all's said and done I have no regrets, What happened between us I will never forget.
using the etymology of deja vuDecember 8, 2009using the etymology of deja vu
i) you squeezed right through me. again. you saw right past me. again.
ii) i know your number; i'm still not moving. (not like you)
iii) you bring up things, such tender things, that you know you ought not mention.
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there are three different you's here (you's me): you know who you are, yet you all sting the same, and sound the same, and taste the same; (as if i knew that)
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it is a quarter to nine, and i'm fucking DONE.
anthropologist's metamorphosei don't know your middle name, where my fibula is, how many second(best)s in a school year, or what your reaction would be if i fainted in a crowded hallway before english class,anthropologist's metamorphose
from locking my knees and locking my keys in the trunk– while i truncate my anatomy with the chainsaw behind your ears.
my misfortunes are locked in an unsafe (along with my scapulae, and last month's sternum) i swallowed the copies the third day i saw you, but
no matter how far i outstretch my phant
Free WriteNani? What is this? So confused.... Is this supposed to be a poem? If so I've already failed. Yup definitely a poem. Lets see....Free Write
Silence descends Gradually upon the crowd Still hearts, still breaths Silence is welcome at last Rest now, fall asleep Expand your mind and dream- Pure light, true light Set aglow this dreary world Awaken the senses Let go of restrictions
Stop following the parade And go your own way Truth be told you shouldn't be here Amongst your wildest dreams But at time its better to be free Destroy all chains Th
Devious Journal Entry
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Tense
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"You've got to stand for something
or you'll fall for anything."
Visit my dA portfolio and my profile, =StarBoyDeath, that's me.
#theWrittenRevolution — where the words are the spark.
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"Look, we are all driven by blood down here in the Alley, you know that as well as I. The key is, love, to not get killed by it. "-Drake- Diary of the Dead
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"Look, we are all driven by blood down here in the Alley, you know that as well as I. The key is, love, to not get killed by it. "-Drake- Diary of the Dead
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"The cloning of humans is on most of the lists of things to worry about from Science, along with behaviour control, genetic engineering, transplanted heads, computer poetry and the unrestrained growth of plastic flowers."
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"painted skies, i've seen so many that cannot compare to your ocean eyes. the pictures you took that covered your room, and it was just like the sun but more like the moon..."
*project-improve
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"painted skies, i've seen so many that cannot compare to your ocean eyes. the pictures you took that covered your room, and it was just like the sun but more like the moon..."
*project-improve
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OYAKATA-SAMA!!
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OYAKATA-SAMA!!
and rawr do you understand the stupid html or css crap 'cause I don't!
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OYAKATA-SAMA!!
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